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| Vorn_Adasca-Draay | Date: Monday, 28 April 14, 8:13 PM | Message # 1 |
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| Requesting the profile here to be valid and for control of the planet Arkania.
Vorn Adasca-Draay
Primarch, Arkanian Dominion
Minister of Science
Owner, Adasca BioMechanical Corporation
Owner, Telerath Interstellar Banking Initiative
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| Jamie_the_Hutt | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 9:12 AM | Message # 2 |
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| I think wanting to be 3x human baseline in strength, agility, speed of reactions and stamina without any major genetic downsides isn't very realistic. I'd like some major downsides to be the price of any such genetic modifications.
"Removal of Human Genomes"? What do you intend this to mean? Removal of his gene matter? Why?
Internal dura armour? Dubious of this in general. I dont think people need armour -inside- them, sure have an organically grown exoskeleton or something but the already messed around internals of this guy I doubt could fit any armour plates inside - especially with his core having to be packed with muscles etc
Jamulon Desilijic Tiure
known as "Jamie the Hutt"
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Nephew to Jabba the Hutt
Associate Member of the Hutt Cartel
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| Vorn_Adasca-Draay | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 2:26 PM | Message # 3 |
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| I modified it to be 1.5x the baseline human, rather than 3x.
Removal of human genomes simply refers to the fact that the mixing of the Adasca and Draay bloodlines produced an Arkanian-Human mix. Vorn has been altered to be about as close to a pureblood Arkanian as one can be without being an actual pureblood.
It's also not armor plates. It's flexible bands over certain areas. Only good to prevent a single blaster bolt from doing too much damage on the first hit. Probably block edged weapons to a greater degree. No effect on a lightsaber, obviously.
Vorn Adasca-Draay
Primarch, Arkanian Dominion
Minister of Science
Owner, Adasca BioMechanical Corporation
Owner, Telerath Interstellar Banking Initiative
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| Jamie_the_Hutt | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 4:13 PM | Message # 4 |
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| Just so you're aware, the high society of the Core would regard surgical enhancement using cybernetics to be pretty crude. Cyborgs are notoriously looked down on and likely aren't citizens on some worlds.
They'd also find the Arkanian predisposition toward genetic manipulation to be ghoulish.. I should urge you to keep genetic modification to a minimum on a character you wish to tout among the great and the good.
Armor/Implants
And what're the negative side effects of this armor inside?
I can see there being utility in some armour around the thorax organs, I might go for that, maybe plating on the ribcage... Its something I'd like to see downsides to though.
To be honest, I think even with the armour, the damage would still be tremendous and so even if you had a plating say under the skin in your stomach, and a blaster rifle hits you? The result would be everything ontop of the armor being fried... youd have severely intensified tissue damage on the surface, and not to mention, any electric based weaponary would pretty much instagib you if the armour has any metal in it... since it would act to help spread the electric current within your body and damage internal organs... also if someone kept firing at the same spot, youd have a superheated melting piece of armor inside you...
Flexible strips inside you sounds like its more likely to ruin your internal organs than anything else. The space to put any thickness of armor inside people is pretty limited. Why not just a skintight thin undergarment of armourweave. Still horribly expensive but isnt going to have any horrible risks or side effects.
Likewise with the commlink. Why not have it be a simple earbud or contact lens commlink?
Genetic modification
So you're genetically modified to be 1.5x normal at various attributes and have a fabulous immune system.
Generally, in an organism, if you add something you have to take something away proportionately. So if I take an antelope, its possible to build a faster antelope by lengthening the legs. However, longer legs are more likely to break. While shorter legs are slower but stronger.
If you have an antelope which has longer legs, it risks being less likely to breed due to risk of breaking the legs. If you have one with shorter legs its slower and so more likely to be eaten by prey. Thats why these things reach an equilibrium suitable for the environment. In star wars there's the human basic human.
I'd like to see
- Reduced reproductive capacity (logical since his genes aren't going to be compatible with a baseline human anymore), offspring produced would be sterile.
- Extreme fatigue much of the time, requiring constant intake of calories and longer periods of sleep.
- Extra muscle mass causes more strain on the skeleton making it much more fragile than a standard human. In addition, muscular/skeletal pain would be regular and severe.
- As with real heightened immune systems, he would have much stronger histamine reactions and so would find himself suffering from severe allergic reactions where previously there would just be a minor one. Also increased risk of his own immune system attacking and rejecting any implants he has put in, indeed possibly even turning on itself and destroying his own body due to it having discrepant genetic coding.
- Heart disease - moving so much faster would put more pressure on the heart, making him more susceptible to heart disease.
- Genetic instability - You'd increase your chances of developing genetic conditions which might be unlikely in an unmodified person.
I could go on but I wont... For every advantage conferred by genetic modification, there should be a price to pay. Its just the quid pro quo of such things. Greater the advantage, greater the risk...
So please select some downsides (and not just the ones like heart disease which won't come up in the RP) to pay the price for playing god.
Jamulon Desilijic Tiure
known as "Jamie the Hutt"
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Bey of the Cygnus Star Empire
Nephew to Jabba the Hutt
Associate Member of the Hutt Cartel
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| Vorn_Adasca-Draay | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 6:03 PM | Message # 5 |
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| To make it easier for you, the subdermal armor has been removed.
He can have reduced reproductive capacity (with humans); however, reproduction with an Arkanian will still produce viable offspring that are virile. Any sterile offspring, of course, could always be tampered with to become non-sterile.
Presumably the implants he has are specifically tailored to him.
However, to compensate for the immune system:
Quote *Vorn's enhanced immune system makes it nearly impossible for him to fall sick from known diseases and sicknesses, being extremely adaptable. However, he must intake extremely high amounts of calories to keep his metabolism running to support the altered immune system. It also makes it hard for him to receive additional cybernetic implants if needed. A serious downside is that it prevents the use of bacta to heal.
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Quote Glandular system allows for increased amounts of adrenaline to be pumped, enhancing strength and speed to 2x the human baseline norm. While the body has been engineered to support this, extended use will cause serious, irreparable muscular breakdown, as well as an 80% chance of massive internal organ failure. However, the gland itself can be consciously 'activated' or deactivated. After activation, additional caloric intake must be accepted or high risk of unconsciousness occurs.
Is that more acceptable?
Vorn Adasca-Draay
Primarch, Arkanian Dominion
Minister of Science
Owner, Adasca BioMechanical Corporation
Owner, Telerath Interstellar Banking Initiative
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| Jamie_the_Hutt | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 7:34 PM | Message # 6 |
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| Say more than 12 hours sustained use of his enhanced mode will burn him out? Also, as per what adrenaline does (being a natural stimulant) I'd like him to be on edge and easily stressed or made anxious during such a condition.
I'd also like him to suffer from skeleto-muscular pain after doing any dramatic feats or major uses. Nothing major but just requiring medication.
Also. We talk about twice the human norm.. are we talking guy at walmart "norm" or "worlds strongest man" because I dont really want a character say, lifting something ridiculous without the heavy musculature which protects the bones on such people. Like how much do you want to lift? How fast do you want to be able to run?
Jamulon Desilijic Tiure
known as "Jamie the Hutt"
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Bey of the Cygnus Star Empire
Nephew to Jabba the Hutt
Associate Member of the Hutt Cartel
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| Vorn_Adasca-Draay | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 8:28 PM | Message # 7 |
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| Since I'm not familiar with the 'world's strongest' in each class, and since Vorn is already musculature and flexible, due to regular workouts and training sessions (he is rather into martial arts, after all, which require speed, flexibility and strength), for the sake of argument, assume at peak 'flow' with the gland turned all the way open and not a short 'spurt' use that he could keep up with, say, a Jedi Knight for five minutes.
I would disagree with this part slightly:
Quote Jamie_the_Hutt (  ) Also, as per what adrenaline does (being a natural stimulant) I'd like him to be on edge and easily stressed or made anxious during such a condition.
Largely because adrenaline can be used to help focus in extreme situations. However, he probably wouldn't be thinking rationally at 'peak' levels.
Vorn Adasca-Draay
Primarch, Arkanian Dominion
Minister of Science
Owner, Adasca BioMechanical Corporation
Owner, Telerath Interstellar Banking Initiative
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| Jamie_the_Hutt | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 9:27 PM | Message # 8 |
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| Adrenaline does indeed help focus in extreme situations, and undoubtedly he would be thinking pretty quickly. However, as mentioned anxiety and edginess can be problematic also, especially with prorogued use.
Jedi Knight level force speed is very very quick indeed. If we drop it down to a skilled Padawan's level then I'd be more open. Otherwise I am happy for say 1.5x his base strength and speed able to be sustained for some hours. Or indeed mentally speeding up for several hours.
Jamulon Desilijic Tiure
known as "Jamie the Hutt"
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Bey of the Cygnus Star Empire
Nephew to Jabba the Hutt
Associate Member of the Hutt Cartel
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| Vorn_Adasca-Draay | Date: Friday, 02 May 14, 11:04 PM | Message # 9 |
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| I'll go with skilled Padawan, for speed wise. Good with the rest.
Vorn Adasca-Draay
Primarch, Arkanian Dominion
Minister of Science
Owner, Adasca BioMechanical Corporation
Owner, Telerath Interstellar Banking Initiative
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| Jamie_the_Hutt | Date: Sunday, 04 May 14, 0:35 AM | Message # 10 |
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| Il vote to approve with the stated caveats Jace needs to weigh in though probably on some details. I don't see why you shouldn't play him (but avoid special abilities until Jace's ruling obviously) directly if you'd like to jump in..
Jamulon Desilijic Tiure
known as "Jamie the Hutt"
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Bey of the Cygnus Star Empire
Nephew to Jabba the Hutt
Associate Member of the Hutt Cartel
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